u need to think about what made dragonball z so special, we dont want another shitty one like GT, although the transformations were awesome. just have a think about this. and please for fuck sake, people stop drawing those damn red long haired super saiyans, they look so stupid. kk ythe red hair is okay, but the long gay hair and how they look evil is stupid.

people really need to keep things into context.

if you cant see that the frieza scenario happened during the dbz saga your retarted. friezas mum is gonna attack earth and try to get one of the saiyans to help her conquer the universe.

and why would one of the Kais have a child with king cold? i know she isnt meant to be but lets face it she is.

but aside from all the small mistakes that make you want to never read this again… i was shitted by the fact that the person who wrote this was too stupid to know how to spell ‘Buu’

WTF people?

You’ve obviously got some talent when it comes to story telling, but I think you need to take your time and refine your skills. Timing and clarity is absolutely everything in something like this.

Okay, so assuming that Freeza did have a mother, this is how I’d introduce her. I’ll do this as a comic book script, maybe it’ll help.

Page 1

Frame 1: Fill in black

DECADES AFTER THE DESTRUCTION OF KID BUU

Mysterious voice: “Hmph, monkeys.”

Frame 2:

From behind a mysterious figure, we see what looks to be the interior of a dark elevator. The back of this figure is remeniscent of Freeza.

Mysterious figure: “To think that it’s taken us this long to prepare for this battle… it’s disgracefull.”

Frame 3:

Frontal view of Freeza’s mother’s face, she has hair similar to a Kai, but her features are also reminiscent of King Cold’s as well.

Freeza’s Mother: If I had been in control the whole time, none of this would have happened. My foolish son never realized that this little empire required a woman’s touch.

Page 2

Frame 1:

The elevator comes to a stop, Freeza’s mother is shown from behind:

Elevator: HMMMM FZZSHH

Frame 2:

From the elevator, Freeza’s mother emmerges into a command bridge, several subbordinates including her other son Cooler *because the DBZ movies are out of normal continuity, this would introduce these characters into the main timeline… I also do not count GT as a part of the timeline since it isn’t based on the Manga*

Cooler: Mother. We are approaching Earth.

Freeza’s Mother (Ice Box? lolz): Well done, Cooler. I’ll be sure to give you a treat for your occomplishment.

Cooler: …

Frame 3

Close up on Queen Icebox (lol, Akira would probably name her that too, ICE-U-BOX!!):

Freeza’s Mother: Everyone! This is the moment we’ve been waiting for. The time of the super saiyans is over!

Frame 4:

From outside the ship, we see them approaching Earth:

Freeza’s Mother: “It’s time we corrected the time line.”

As you can see, there’s much more build up in this script. It’s all in the flow, the camera angles and the emotion that you’re intending to convey. I suggest you read the following books to get a better grasp on comics theory:

Scott McCloud’s Making Comics

How to Draw Manga -main series and bodies and anatomy-

anything from Will Eisner

How to Draw Comics the Marvel Way

ect